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    عمر السقاف

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    [grade="0000FF FF6347 008000 4B0082"]when the longing starts to grow

    i catch my heart

    dont let me go

    to the empty square

    alone with my weeping mind there

    dont say good bye
    give me a chance
    to hold the sky

    with your smooth touch
    i know what high

    look to the clouds
    are springing in air

    and the birds in their lovely lake

    and dancing through

    and look to my heart

    and what it sake

    how vague my way

    either right or wrong

    i have my faith

    to live in jail

    when my love has gone



    sorry brothers
    its my first trial in writting in this forum
    and this is also my first trial in english poetry
    i know how weak it is
    but i hope to see your assessment

    your lovely brother
    Dr.omar alsakkaf[/grade]
     

    ابن نفل

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    محاولة جيدة يالحبيب

    Good attemp ... considering ur not a native
    of the Language

    keep it up
     

    ماجدولين

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    [color=660066][align=left]Dr. Omar>>>
    Ur words r so true so smooth so elegant...........

    How could u combine between the Medicine , Art and Poetry....,it's so rare and unequaled.....

    I read ur poems at the art section and they r really greaat:eek:
    and now u try to vie us with this lyric poem that u forgot to tell us it's name ?!

    any way it's a nice try from u and i hope that u continue writing what u feels and try to to pay more attention on the rhyme......

    best regards ,,
    Magdoline.[/color]
     

    T_K

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    IMPRESSIVE 3OMAR

    I myself wrote a poem for the first time
    and i mean for the first time (in english or arabic) but it's in english
    u'll see it today or tomorrow in another subject

    but ur words are sensational
    keep it up and never get discouraged

    TK
     

    عمر السقاف

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    my brother
    ابن نفل
    thanx a lot for your support

    and i can`t express my emotions to ward
    your cute words

    be in touch
    my lovely brother


    omar
     

    عمر السقاف

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    our big boss
    Magdoline
    thanx alot for your support
    and i`m grateful
    and i know that there is some mistakes in the rhythm
    but i `ll try to correct it in the future
    again i say thank u for support,big heart and advice

    the name of the poem is
    {alone

    ur brother
    omar
     

    عمر السقاف

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    Dear/T_K

    thanx a lot
    and i wish to see your poem
    and i think its so great

    and again i say thank you

    be in touch my cute brother


    omar
     

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    waaaaaaaaaaaaaaw
    what i see here
    doctor omar
    genious

    great
    smooth fantastic words jump you to fantazia

    what a man you are ??

    regards
     

    عمر السقاف

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    hello
    Dr.mohammad
    thanx a lot
    i am a student in your school


    i cant say any thing
    i have just one word
    you are in my heart

    ur brother
    omar